Thomas Mann’s Craft: The Sentence and the Whole
Spoiler warning. The close readings discuss scenes in Death in Venice, Buddenbrooks, The Magic Mountain, and Doctor Faustus.
Mann’s long forms often depend on a delayed return. Within a sentence, a man can sit through a procession of titles before the prose lets us look at his face again. Across a novel, an inherited rule can return after a decision has put it to a fresh test. Across the interval, a reader carries something forward, grows accustomed to it, and eventually has to bring it into contact with an event it no longer comfortably fits.
His finest writing makes that interval productive. Its clauses alter the judgment with which we entered, and its motifs return after something has happened to the people who use them. His weaker writing keeps us waiting through variations that confirm the same judgment. Length then becomes a demand on attention that the passage has ceased to repay.
Keep the main clause alive
A sentence can remain in motion after its main clause has made complete grammatical sense. In chapter V of Death in Venice, Mann gives us the seated Gustav Aschenbach, postpones our next look at him, and brings him back under the burden of everything inserted between the two appearances.
Both long sentences quoted here are complete working translations of the 1912 German text. They preserve Mann’s clause sequence and sentence boundaries so that we can examine the construction. [1]
He sat there, the master, the artist who had attained dignity, the author of A Wretch, who in a form of such exemplary purity had renounced bohemianism and murky depths, had withdrawn his sympathy from the abyss and repudiated depravity, the man who had risen so high, who, having overcome his knowledge and outgrown all irony, had accustomed himself to the obligations of public confidence, he whose fame was official, whose name was ennobled, and whose style boys were instructed to take as their model—he sat there, his eyelids were closed, only now and then a mocking and embarrassed glance slipped sideways from beneath them and quickly hid again, and his slack lips, cosmetically heightened, formed individual words from what his half-slumbering brain produced in its strange dream-logic.
— Thomas Mann, Death in Venice, chapter V, translated here from the German [1]
The first three words have already completed an action. “He sat there” could end the sentence. Mann keeps it open through appositions and relative clauses attached to the man. Master, dignified artist, exemplary author, public figure, schoolroom model. Each addition makes us look upward through a career, although the body we began with has stayed on the steps of a cistern.
The hierarchy is easy to follow through the accumulation. The titles belong to the seated man, the judgments belong to his literary standing, and the last relative clause carries that standing into the classroom. Mann can expand the sentence without losing the person to whom it will have to return.
Then he repeats “he sat there.” The resumption restores the action with almost indecent simplicity. After such a career, still this man, in this place. Now the clauses attend to smaller and less governable movements. A glance slips out and hides. Lips form fragments of speech. The official reputation has been succeeded, within the same grammatical enclosure, by a face that cannot maintain its public expression.
Aschenbach has been following a boy through Venice, has lost sight of him, and has sat down hot and thirsty. That context determines what the sentence can hurt. The ranks and honors are real accomplishments within the fiction. Mann has made us spend enough time among them to feel their authority before returning to the man whom they cannot compose. The long sentence holds admiration and mortification together for longer than a short verdict could.
Where accumulation goes slack
The weaker sentence comes in chapter II of the same novella. Mann is describing the heroic endurance embodied by Aschenbach’s fictional works. Immediately before this sentence, Mann has associated Aschenbach’s favorite hero with Saint Sebastian and called endurance an active triumph. The sentence below surveys the works for evidence of a similar heroism. [1]
If one looked into this narrated world, one saw the elegant self-command that concealed inward erosion, biological decay, from the eyes of the world until the last moment; the yellow ugliness, disadvantaged in sensual life, that could fan its smoldering lust into a pure flame, indeed ascend to dominion in the realm of beauty; the pale powerlessness that drew strength from the glowing depths of the spirit to cast an entire arrogant people down at the foot of the cross, at the feet of powerlessness itself; the graceful bearing in the empty and stern service of form; the false, dangerous life, the swiftly enervating longing and art of the born deceiver: if one considered all these destinies and so many others like them, one could doubt whether there was any heroism at all besides the heroism of weakness.
— Thomas Mann, Death in Venice, chapter II, translated here from the German [1]
This is a sentence Mann should have shortened. The catalogue helps give an imaginary writer a body of work, though its governing account of that work is already in place. Five entries occupy the same grammatical position, each an object of what “one saw.” Self-command, ugliness, powerlessness, bearing, and life occupy equal grammatical positions that prepare the final classification, the heroism of weakness. The return to “if one considered” restarts the conditional after the catalogue has made us hold it for so long. What finally follows is a label we were prepared to supply before the list began.
The middle entries become more vehement. Lust burns into a pure flame. Powerlessness forces a people to its feet. The scale rises, but our task stays the same. The narrator has told us how to classify these lives before we have seen any of them lived. These imagined books have no independent scenes before us through which we could test the judgments. The reader receives an interpretation, an illustration of that interpretation, and then its generalization.
The cistern sentence changes the kind of material we are attending to. It carries us from titles to eyelids and lips, bringing public command up against bodily lapse. The catalogue keeps its examples in the narrator’s abstract vocabulary throughout. Its last phrase closes a classification. The later sentence makes an action resume under conditions the opening words could not contain on their own.
In the German, both sentences exceed a hundred words. Their unequal force comes from what the waiting produces. Cutting two entries from the catalogue would diminish its fullness and leave its thought substantially where it was. Remove the return to the face from the cistern sentence and the career never has to meet the man.
Architecture gives recurrence a history
The same choice governs Mann’s larger constructions. He can introduce something as a rule of conduct, let a person act under it or evade it, then bring it back in a form that the next generation finds easy to admire. The reader remembers a use the people at the later occasion can overlook.
In Buddenbrooks, Jean invokes the family’s old injunction to conduct business so that one can sleep at night. He is explaining why he has given up a risky export trade. Much later, the maxim appears above four generations of portraits in a walnut frame presented to Thomas at the firm’s centenary. The words have traveled from a reason for abandoning a venture to an ornament honoring the business. [2]
Between those appearances, Thomas has agreed to buy a crop still in the field. When he considers using his senatorial letterhead, a deal he hopes will revive the firm assumes the appearance of a personal favor. The portrait frame comes after this decision. Mann has placed the act before the celebration that seems to certify its actor. The motto can be received as a tribute only after it has had a chance to trouble our reading of the transaction.
That order is architecture. Moving the business decision after the gift would turn the maxim into a warning of what is to come. Its actual placement requires us to reconsider something already done. The portraits turn a working rule into a claim about a family’s character, and the reader has grounds to hesitate where courtesy calls for thanks.
Other recurrences connect the same chapters at different scales. Gilded grain separates the portraits, preserving the crop as decoration. Actual grain remains exposed in the field. Hail rattles above the stairs during the music, then returns through a dispatch whose wording Mann withholds. Thomas can barely speak about the little bit of hail. What had first been incidental sound has become the event he must absorb among congratulatory telegrams. The frame, the investment, and the weather draw together through their placement. Calling grain a symbol of decline would skip the decisions that gave it this force.
Let the motif change the phrase
Mann’s recurrence can be worked as closely as a musical variation. A motif needs enough identity to be heard on its return and enough alteration to reward the hearing. Doctor Faustus makes that process audible inside Wendell Kretzschmar’s lecture on Beethoven’s final piano sonata, Op. 111. [3]
The little three-note figure in its second movement can be fitted with Leb' – mir wohl, farewell. In Zeitblom’s description, a C-sharp comes in before the familiar figure near the end of the variations. Mann fits the expanded phrase with Leb' mir – ewig wohl, farewell forever. The melody has endured the variations before this alteration of its farewell. A reader who cannot name the intervals can still try the changed phrase and hear what the added syllables ask it to carry.
The lecture’s architecture gives the variation another consequence. Kretzschmar has made listening strenuous by playing, singing, and speaking together. His audience bends forward, hands between knees, looking from his mouth to his hands. At the end he stays at the piano, facing them in the same posture. Later, the listeners sing the motif as they take their coats and disperse. The phrase continues through the streets in both its forms. A musical example has become something the people in the scene can perform for themselves.
What to steal from Thomas Mann
Give delay a structural destination. Keep clear the subject and action to which your long sentence will return. Let the intervening clauses change what that return means. Read the opening and ending together, then check what would be lost if the middle vanished.
Plan a motif’s later use. A family saying can begin as advice and return as a tribute. Establish why people use it on both occasions. The intervening conduct should give the reader something to remember that a later speaker may prefer to forget.
Vary the return itself. A word, note, or object can come back through another mouth, in another medium, or with an addition. Keep its identity clear enough for the alteration to be felt.
What not to steal from Thomas Mann
The procession of honorifics, cultural references, and judgments belongs to the Aschenbach sentence’s very specific trap. It puts us under the spell of a reputation before making us look at the person who bears it. Transplant that ceremony into a description whose subject has nothing to undergo and the grammar becomes a credential of the writer’s own seriousness. Start with the divided demands on your character. Choose the vocabulary those demands actually use.
The same danger attends musical motifs. An extra recurrence can sound composed without having acquired a consequence. Naming your character’s melody, climate, illness, and favorite flower repeatedly will give a reader plenty to remember. Decide what the next appearance enables the reader to hear or judge that was unavailable before.
Where Thomas Mann falls short
The catalogue in Death in Venice turns imagined lives into exhibits for an already stated diagnosis. Its enlargement takes pace from the surrounding portrait, and the final classification gives little back. This loss belongs to Mann’s own sentence, with its repeated objects and renewed conditional. It survives a careful reading of the intention behind it.
Longer ideological passages can impose a related burden. In The Magic Mountain, Settembrini asks who would exercise the terror Naphta proposes. The answer moves through church teaching on property, prices, interest, and trade before identifying the world proletariat. Mann has introduced an urgent question, then makes the reader attend to an extended intellectual genealogy. Several steps can proceed much as they do with Hans Castorp absent. His excited intervention over interest briefly restores a listener whose response can change the exchange. The intervening exposition taxes that scene’s capacity to remain an encounter. [4]
Mann’s scale can make a small inequality in attention expensive. A classification expanded into a hundred-word sentence, or a doctrinal case sustained after the participants have little left to do, can occupy the place where the reader needs another resistance, response, or event.
After Mann — similar authors and further reading
Read chapter I of Tolstoy’s The Death of Ivan Ilyich beside the Buddenbrooks centenary. The official death notice prompts calculations about promotion and transfer. Follow how Tolstoy supplies the private calculation immediately, while Mann delays the contents of the telegram and follows its effect on the recipient. Both organize judgment by deciding when information becomes available. [5]
Read the first chapter of Musil’s The Man Without Qualities for a shorter verbal recurrence. A spectator feels relieved when her companion mentions a truck’s braking distance. She has heard the term and has no wish to learn its meaning. Compare how a technical phrase can settle the feelings of someone who has scarcely examined it with the demands Mann places on a phrase that changes through use. [6]
FAQ
Does a long sentence need an event to justify its length?
It can develop a thought, perception, or uncertainty. The test is what changes during the reading. The cistern sentence alters our attention from earned authority to bodily action. The catalogue makes us receive more examples of a conclusion already established. An abstract sentence can have movement if its later clauses revise the terms of its beginning.
Where is the clearest place to study Mann’s motifs?
For a compact study, read Buddenbrooks, Part VIII, chapters 2, 4, and 5, then go back to Jean’s letter on the export trade. Separate the long return of the maxim from the brief return of the hail. One depends on remembered conduct across generations, the other on a recent sound becoming private news. For entry points into the novels, use the Mann reading guide.
Sources
[1] Thomas Mann, Der Tod in Venedig, Hyperionverlag Hans von Weber, 1912, chapters II and V. The two complete long sentences are translated here from the German, retaining their clause order. The corresponding German openings are “Blickte man hinein in diese erzählte Welt” and “Er saß dort, der Meister.” Project Gutenberg. Kenneth Burke’s 1924 translation, The Dial, vol. LXXVI, divides the later German sentence into three. Project Gutenberg
[2] Thomas Mann, Buddenbrooks, translated by H. T. Lowe-Porter, Knopf, 1927 reprint. Vol. I, p. 177, Jean’s letter on the Scottish trade. Project Gutenberg. Vol. II, Part VIII, chapters 2, 4–5, especially pp. 93–94 and 101–104. Project Gutenberg. German text checked against the Deutsche Buch-Gemeinschaft edition. Project Gutenberg
[3] Thomas Mann, Doktor Faustus, Fischer Taschenbuch Verlag, 1990, chapter VIII. Projekt Gutenberg-DE. For Adorno’s help with the Arietta, see Mann’s letter of October 5, 1943 and the editors’ commentary, Briefwechsel 1943–1955, Suhrkamp, pp. 9–12. Publisher excerpt
[4] Thomas Mann, Der Zauberberg, S. Fischer, 1924, vol. II, chapter VI, “Vom Gottesstaat und von übler Erlösung.” Project Gutenberg. English context checked in H. T. Lowe-Porter’s 1927 translation, “Of the City of God, and Deliverance by Evil.” Bookwise
[5] Leo Tolstoy, The Death of Ivan Ilyich, translated by Louise and Aylmer Maude, chapter I. Spokane Community College
[6] Robert Musil, Der Mann ohne Eigenschaften, Book I, Part I, chapter 1, digital edition of the Robert Musil Institute. Musil Online
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